You guys, I have to be honest. I've got midterms and papers that have taken away my focus. So, this free entry is going to be really short since I haven't really put any focus into writing for this class or myself. It's just going to be a change from my Week 2 Calisthenics.
Original:
2. Kim was angered by her boyfriend.
*Her nails dug
into the palms of her hands when he mentioned his ex's boobs and how
they filled out a halter top dress better than hers.
Revised:
She dug her nails into the palms of her hands until she imprinted little crescent moons at Steve's mention of his ex's boobs. Apparently, Stacy's D size bra filled out a red halter better than her C cup.
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