My second peer response for the week is Taylor’s Free Entry
titled, “The Fish.” I really loved this! You added great detailed and you put
me into the scene! I love how you said, “The cement block wobbles under the
fear in my feet.” It wasn’t your feet that wobbled but the cement you were
standing on at the swim meet. That was an interesting way to put that. You
added blunt words at the beginning of your stanzas too like “Focus,” “Now,” “Step
Up,” etc. It kept the reader paying attention. You did such a great job with
this! I do believe this is what we have been talking about in class about
showing, but not too much. :)
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