Classmate Response #2 Week #1

April's Free Entry:

I am a serious writer.  I have my special spot, speckled with interesting things to look at. Things that make me interesting.  My hand- painted Celtic cross, for example, which reminds me that I am artistic. I have a ring. Ring? Hold on, it’s my mom. I have to get that. Ok. Where was I? God that woman is crazy. Was I really born from her? She can say the strangest things sometimes. Oh yes. Writing.  My work! I have a nice spot by the window where I can look out and see the thump.  Thump? What are these kids doing now? I’ll be right back.

Ok. I’ve successfully moderated the lego fight. God I hate stepping on legos. Now back to the business at hand.  I had this interesting idea involving flow theory. I like the way that concept…flows? I’ll need to look flow up in the thesaurus, see if I can’t fix that...too redundant.  I also like the word “autotelic” – how interesting. Automatic. Teller. Automated teller. Like those canisters that shoot up and down the tubes in place of conversation at my bank. Back and forth, back and forth. I like watching them shoot around. If I had more money, or more to deposit, I would do that three times a day. Drive up to the drive-through just to watch those canisters shoot up, down and…yes? I know honey, but mommy’s doing homework. Can you make yourself a bologna sandwich? Already had one? Open the door, I don’t like it when you talk to me through the door.  Have you eaten an apple? You have? What about those peanut butter crackers you like. No? You want something hot? Okay. I’ll be right there. Let me just click save.   


My response:
I think this is really funny. I feel like this is how writing works for a mother. She can sit down to have an idea and start writing and then the children interrupt. They need her for one thing or another. April writes it like it's just one single flowing thing because it is to a mother. It runs together in a weird way that displays how life interrupts no matter what. I like the tangent about her mother. I thought it was really inventive to put in there a phone call from her mom and then have to complain about her before she regains her previous train of thought. The only thing that I would critique would be that she forgot the comma after God. Though, that is a minor mistake and if that is the only critique about it than I would be completely happy if I were her. Good work April! :)